I'm not gonna be pedantic but I am gonna say that i do notice some minor spelling and grammatical errors here and there, which would usually be a complete turn off (In both senses!) in most literature, but this story's just so damn well-written and the characters and art style are so amazing that I can actually just ignore them completely and nothing hurts.
That panel of Lisa on the bus(?) is absolutely gorgeous. :3 I think that's the point where you really started to improve a lot. I've seen current art for this, and it's freaking amazing. Well done!! I look forward to even more pages of this! ^__^ I love the real-life, romantic elements in the comic, too. It gives the sexier parts more reason and gravity, and it makes me love the characters more. :3
When I read this I'm not reading porn. When I see this I'm not seeing a lesbian relationship. No, when I cast my eyes on this AMAZING tale I see a love story unparalleled, because it's truth. This is what everyone wants, that significant other who makes you feel wanted and warm and above all else... loved. This is one of the greatest stories I've ever read on dA. You, my friend are an INCREDULOUS story teller and have my everlasting respect.