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wot a twist hun, anyways this one is gonna be updated into first chapter.

so , why do it this way, well it is simple, through the course of the story i will get into switching monologues, showing stuff from different angles, and have characters state some opinions in hindsight, so i figured this solves my problem and makes the storytelling easie------sure i could have been more clever...buut im a lazy slacker so... what you see is what you get muahahaha
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eddyspaghetti8 Feb 14, 2014  New member Hobbyist General Artist
How very often I feel just like her. We all need that inner voice to say "Just write", or create, or draw, or DO IT.
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CookieRoll Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Just going through this again... and I just saw that frickin picture with Alan and Annie! What an evil spoiler!!!! >:C
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shaggyxangel Feb 5, 2014  New member
"Underwhelming"? NO! AWESOME!
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:iconsasinak:
Great story!
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:icontucraz:
I'm not sure where you get this is underwhelming. It's the perfect first page. I didn't realized such a thing existed!
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:iconpapillonberyl:
Merci beaucoup for the intro.  The sheer hesitation and uncertainty your dialogue exhibits is astounding.  It's fractured enough to demonstrate a true thought process yet flows coherently and creates an atmosphere that compels the reader to keep going forward, curious to know what happened that has brought your character to this point.  
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:icontwyllia:
I LUV THE WAY YOU PAINT YOUR ARTWORK =D
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:iconeideecee:
Underwhelming my ass. It's real.
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:iconalorix:
That might have been the best start to a story i've seen. Totally relatable . 
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MaggieRaven Jan 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Love it!
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