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(Contains: sexual themes)
wot a twist hun, anyways this one is gonna be updated into first chapter.

so , why do it this way, well it is simple, through the course of the story i will get into switching monologues, showing stuff from different angles, and have characters state some opinions in hindsight, so i figured this solves my problem and makes the storytelling easie------sure i could have been more clever...buut im a lazy slacker so... what you see is what you get muahahaha
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VincentAParker Featured By Owner 1 day ago  Hobbyist General Artist
Dear God...you just personified what I've been going through for a few years with my own story. Shit damn!
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joekou52 Featured By Owner May 17, 2015  New Deviant
want does the engraving on the ring say
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anthrax117 Featured By Owner May 19, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
'Forever Mine'
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:iconjoekou52:
joekou52 Featured By Owner May 19, 2015  New Deviant
cool thanks
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Octavian-the-Great Featured By Owner May 16, 2015
too much text
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MickArriaga Featured By Owner May 2, 2015
So true.  I once started an online story in a chat group based on the first sentence: "The frog sat by the door with eyes as big as saucers." It turned out to be a fantasy about sorcery. A wizard lusting after a maiden and an unexpected "prince" to save her. No, he wasn't from nobility, but he was her prince nonetheless. So keep at it. You do a great job!
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Warchief-Sariel83 Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ooo... Sunstone ^^
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Yurosoku Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2015
I feel her pain, jumping first in to a story writing is NEVER easy. Well done with the story!
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rasterimage Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2015   General Artist
Oh, lord.

Not only not underwhelming but I'd say all too resonant.

You're one hell of a storyteller.

Not that it isn't a classic bit of stage business to do a carefully set up and paced telling of how there is nothing to tell.

But yes.
And yes.
And yes.

Oh, and I just love the sunset.
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Ask-MyMPD Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2015  Student Writer
You have me hooked from the first page. I love the lighting I love your natural art style and I am already deeply in love with this character. 
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CostaRicaMoskito Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
I freaking love the drawing. Teach me.
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GeckosFancies Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2015
I love the glow from the window, it lends the sequence such warmth. Lots of little details that spark my curiosity. Also I enjoy the meta writing thinking here... ^_^ I like this approach to an intro! it makes it feel real to me. 
A friend told me about Sunstone, the premise makes me really hopeful, the intro more so. I'm gonna read on soon as I have time to sit down in peace. Looking forward to it.
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evahopkins Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Catching up on this charmer of a comic again before buying the collection. <3
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CarbonxKiwi Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2015
Oh wow, the art style is beautiful and the line work is excellent with the slight sketchiness--feels very true to life, without impeccably cut and defined lines--and the colouring is divine. Love the outfits, too, and can't wait to get into that storyline of hers! :D
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deviantxman Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2014
Wow. Awesome first, uuuh, zero page.  Laugh. Sexy already. Interesting.  Thoughtful. Beautifully drawn.
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Tiafain789 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2014
This is by FAR the best story I've gotten so invested into the characters in a long, long time.
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SHINA87 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2014
Very good start :)
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Looking4Work Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2014
A very bad sign when it begins with the removal of a wedding ring. Kind of rules out a happy ending, no matter what comes next.
(Of course, I will keep reading...)
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JTM93 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I think it is more of removing the ring to write. A surprisingly common practice to keep the ring from rubbing the finger raw.
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:iconlooking4work:
Looking4Work Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2014
Really? Didn't know that. Thanks.
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eramosat Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2014
we are at your pleasurable mercy!
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BlackChapters Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Awesome stuff. I like it
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000RainbowChick000 Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this beginning, so easy going yet Deep, very nice. And your drawing style is beautiful!
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JustaJeeper Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2014
Love everything about this but I am having a hard time figuring out the proper order to read them in.
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Mudfoot001 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2014
OK, so this whole thing is magnificent.
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Phoneix-Faerie Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
this is amazing :) Really interesting start
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Stvz Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2014
I have no idea what is going on (just got here). And I already love it. :)

Makes me want to pick up my own writing... yeah, like that's going to happen...
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hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2014  Professional Writer
Meant to comment on this some time ago. YppleJax described this to me, and I think it's lovely and a sweet story. :heart:
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Angel--of--Mysteries Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Underwhelmed? I'm the perfect amount of whelmed, thank you!^^ The way you drew/painted this is breathtaking, and I loved the way her shadow looked in the sunlight! She already has a great personality and has managed to make me laugh already ^^
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evahopkins Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm finally diving in to this story. :) I've delayed too long!
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NICHOLASROTHDRAWS Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
Great
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MrsBlinkandMissItt Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh my God, I know them feels! Haha, this was just amazing in every way, but I especially love the colors. So pretty!Hamtaro Mouse Emoji-03 (Squee) [V1] 
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KisaraelElementum Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes i am the exact same way when writing........... and............ damn it.... it is awesome.....
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Ironysince1997 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is really amazing. I especially love the  silhouette in panel 12. It's just so wonderfully real and funny. "Bah...F*ck it!....Procrastination time..." True That Stamp Seto Kousuke (Being shy and kawaii) [10] 
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sevenyears3 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014
As a writer, I giggled as I read this!  It is soooo me!  loved it!
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Shaudawn Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I completely relate.  I faved it just for that recognition.
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AgentB-7 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2014  Student Writer
Pal, you're genius, do you know that?
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Swoopmott Featured By Owner May 24, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
I have now seen the perfect first page to a story. This is just beautiful
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Hypersaurus Featured By Owner May 12, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
dat lip bite!
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LindenLixr Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing!
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Forsta Featured By Owner May 6, 2014  Professional Artist
This is just some of the best stuff ever. Please keep drawing and writing these until the end of time.
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kinuyasha2 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014
I'm not sure how I wound up reading a "story about S/M loving girls", but I'm glad I did!

The art is very vivid, I love your style, and the characters are very real.  I found myself becoming emotionally invested in the characters very quickly.  They are both more than a little adorable.  I'm not sure what I expected to find in an S/M story, but it sure wasn't tenderness.

Great work!
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eddyspaghetti8 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
How very often I feel just like her. We all need that inner voice to say "Just write", or create, or draw, or DO IT.
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CookieRoll Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Just going through this again... and I just saw that frickin picture with Alan and Annie! What an evil spoiler!!!! >:C
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shaggyxangel Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014
"Underwhelming"? NO! AWESOME!
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sasinak Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014
Great story!
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tucraz Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
I'm not sure where you get this is underwhelming. It's the perfect first page. I didn't realized such a thing existed!
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PapillonBeryl Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014
Merci beaucoup for the intro.  The sheer hesitation and uncertainty your dialogue exhibits is astounding.  It's fractured enough to demonstrate a true thought process yet flows coherently and creates an atmosphere that compels the reader to keep going forward, curious to know what happened that has brought your character to this point.  
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twyllia Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014
I LUV THE WAY YOU PAINT YOUR ARTWORK =D
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EiDeeCee Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014
Underwhelming my ass. It's real.
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